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Post by luvtpiya Thu Sep 02, 2010 5:37 pm

fufufufu
akhirnya akhirnyaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
bisa share crita buatanku [Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern 280491
hehe gk terlalu bagus sih tpi gpp y.....enjoy it [Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern 280491

[Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern 956334silahkan dibaca dan di kritik [Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern 956334

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UPDATE!!!

sejak Nulis Diabloist arc saya edit dari Chapter 1 dgn tambahan beberapa gambar untuk lbih jelas [Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern 280491
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untuk senjata biasa saya gambar sendiri [Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern 730577

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ALCHEMIST SCHOOL WY-VERN
*** Alchest arc ***

chapter I:alchemist school wy-vern:
Scenes 1:Mac:
chapter II:Dean Sensei:
chapter III:Alchest:
Chapter IV:Ghost at school?:



ALCHEMIST SCHOOL WY-VERN
*** Diabloist Arc ***

..... START NOW .....

Karena ga bisa tambah post lagi (kepenuhan dengan gambar) jadi saya masukin ke Comment saja

KLIK LINK DIBAWAH INI UNTUK MELIHAT CERITA LANJUTANNYA

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Post by Kury Thu Sep 02, 2010 7:28 pm

em fanfic fantasy... mungkin bisa sedikit dijelasin baik latar dan nama" disana karena saya sebagai orang awam jujur saja bingung...

lalu masih kasar y nulisnya... mungkin bisa diperhalus agar lebih mudah dimengerti...

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Post by luvtpiya Thu Sep 02, 2010 7:34 pm

ooooooo ic" coba deh
*baru pertama x buat crita itupun cuma muncul di otak aj td =P *
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Post by Kury Thu Sep 02, 2010 7:53 pm

kamu bisa buat penjalasan tentang apa yg dilakukan si tokoh lebih banyak... karena jika hanya percakapan maka pembaca tidak akan bisa membayangkan...

tapi jujur saya g bisa buat cerita fantasy... jadi berusahalah lebih baik lagi [Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern 354797
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Post by kuroRan Thu Sep 02, 2010 8:34 pm

kalau cerita fantasy memang gak cocok bentuk skenario karena bakal gak ngejelasin tentang latar dan beberapa hal Ahaha
tapi lumayan kok, nice job Thumb
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Post by kuroro Fri Sep 03, 2010 10:53 am

lanjutkan!!
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Post by luvtpiya Sun Sep 05, 2010 3:37 pm

ooooh coba edit deh Kya~!
tambah hancur [Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern 697832
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Post by emasmurni Sun Sep 05, 2010 8:19 pm

Anda adalah member pertama yang bikin fanfic pake emoticon
saya kasih Rep+ sebagai penghargaan "member pertama yang bikin fanfic pake emoticon"
ceritanya masih bener2 kasar jadi mungkin bisa diperhalus lagi seperti kata Kury-san, saya bacanya sampe puyeng Confused2
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Post by Kury Sun Sep 05, 2010 8:40 pm

member pertama pake emo ? [Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern 215283 bener juga ya...

hha... berarti dia nulisnya langsung disini... [Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern 975206
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Post by luvtpiya Sun Sep 05, 2010 9:02 pm

Kury wrote:member pertama pake emo ? [Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern 215283 bener juga ya...

hha... berarti dia nulisnya langsung disini... [Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern 975206

kalau copy ntar paraghraphnya luaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaas
seperti ini:
aku suka kamu...


aku juga suka....
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Post by kuroro Mon Sep 06, 2010 8:55 am

luvtpiya wrote:
kalau copy ntar paraghraphnya luaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaas
seperti ini:
aku suka kamu...


aku juga suka....
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lanjutkan!!! *dilempar panci*
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Post by kuroRan Mon Sep 06, 2010 10:27 am

kuroro wrote:
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lanjutkan!!! *dilempar panci*

lagi-lagi komentar yang sama Erm...
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Post by luvtpiya Mon Sep 06, 2010 11:34 am

@senpai" :bisa tlg ksi tw nda di bagian mnnya kurang mungkin bsa diperbaiki Gongxi
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SuikaSulk Re: [Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern

Post by kuroro Mon Sep 06, 2010 11:51 am

kuroRan wrote:

lagi-lagi komentar yang sama Erm...
soalnya setelah selesai membaca cuman itu yang terlintas di kepala
nggak termasuk ngejunk kan?

luvtpiya wrote:@senpai" :bisa tlg ksi tw nda di bagian mnnya kurang mungkin bsa diperbaiki Gongxi
hmmm
seperti yang sudah disebutkan di atas2, saya cuman bisa mengulang saja
bisa lebih diperjelas mengenai setting dan kondisi dari karakter ataupun lingkungan
trus masalah paragraf dan tanda baca juga diperhatikan ya
soalnya agak susah buat memahami dalam sekali baca kalau paragrafnya kurang teratur
jangan malu2 naruh "titik" (.)
kalimat nggak harus panjang2 sampe nggak ada titik-nya
oh iya, jangan terlalu banyak memakai "pun" ya
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pokoknya, lanjutkan!!!!
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Post by luvtpiya Mon Sep 06, 2010 12:23 pm

kuroro wrote:
hmmm
seperti yang sudah disebutkan di atas2, saya cuman bisa mengulang saja
bisa lebih diperjelas mengenai setting dan kondisi dari karakter ataupun lingkungan
trus masalah paragraf dan tanda baca juga diperhatikan ya
soalnya agak susah buat memahami dalam sekali baca kalau paragrafnya kurang teratur
jangan malu2 naruh "titik" (.)
kalimat nggak harus panjang2 sampe nggak ada titik-nya
oh iya, jangan terlalu banyak memakai "pun" ya
Gongxi


misal:

pokoknya, lanjutkan!!!!
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ooo Bow thx coba edit lagi Bow
Spoiler:
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Post by kuroro Mon Sep 06, 2010 12:28 pm

nyahahahaha
Kya~!
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Post by Kury Mon Sep 06, 2010 12:41 pm

luvtpiya wrote:@senpai" :bisa tlg ksi tw nda di bagian mnnya kurang mungkin bsa diperbaiki Gongxi

di penjelasannya.... lebih tepatnya kalimat deskripsi... [Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern 57047
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Post by luvtpiya Fri Sep 10, 2010 1:16 am

chapter IV released [Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern 249430 kalau kurang bagus tolong di kritik ya [Fanfic]Alchemist School Wy-vern 681330
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Post by emasmurni Sat Sep 11, 2010 1:41 pm

sweatdrop paling bisa menggambarkan perasaan saya
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Post by luvtpiya Sat Sep 11, 2010 11:52 pm

emasmurni wrote:sweatdrop paling bisa menggambarkan perasaan saya

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Post by kuroro Fri Sep 17, 2010 10:14 am

si nao itu konyol sangat ya
Kya!2
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Post by luvtpiya Sun Dec 04, 2011 1:40 pm

update the truth and the trial Gongxi

tapi event malah ilang PARAH Gya! Sweat mana backup ilang Dead
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Post by luvtpiya Wed Dec 07, 2011 12:09 am

Character Utama:

other:

Diabloist Arc Character:


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Post by luvtpiya Wed Dec 07, 2011 5:42 pm


ALCHEMIST SCHOOL WY-VERN
*** Diabloist Arc ***

chapter V : The Truth And The Trial :
Training:

chapter VI : Diablo’s Knight Return:
Chapter VIII : The Fallen of the Wy-Vern Academy:


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Post by KurosakiAoi Fri Dec 09, 2011 1:23 pm

woah...
sugoi luvtpiya-san..

ni pertama kalinya saya baca fanfic yang ada emo iconnya..

ahahaha
jadi menarik.

tapi maaf, hanya saja, saya kadang bingung saat baca, soalnya, tanda bacanya kadang g pake...

hehehehe
trus berjuang y??
ganbatte!!
i will wait your new fanfic..

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