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Post by Kuzakurei_Itachi on Sun Jun 06, 2010 7:36 pm

Saya sangat suka menulis puisi, tapi hanya yang berbau 'love' dan 'abstract...

Di thread ini saya akan berbagi puisi 'love' saya, semoga anda menyukainya

Fall Down

Spoiler:
Trapped inside my nocturnal despair
Blind, dumb, deaf, paralyzed
Misguided by a falling star
With shivering, hardened heart

'I don't want to be like this'
'Then why did you let your heart go?'
The temptation of the crimson princess is unbearable
lift me high enough just to throw me deeper

Sobbing down here
While you gazing at me, proudly
Regret of being fallen
While you stomping on my head

Then come a hand, hand of an angel
Pull me out of this dark pit
Holding the key to my heart
Let it beating once more

Now I'm not afraid
It's okay to be fallen again
But this time
I'll fall for you

Terus Terulang Lagi UPDATE

Spoiler:
Kulihat ke kanan dan ke kiri,
Mereka tak lagi sendiri,
Terus ku berlari,
Ke sana ke mari,
Tanpa arah yang pasti,
Terpaut ku berdiri,
Menatap awan sunyi,
Adakah esok hari,
Tak mau terus begini,
Terpana ku bernyanyi,
Senandung masa kini,
Syair kosong tanpa puisi,
Tak ayal ku bermimpi,
Tentang hidupku ini,
Akankah terulang lagi?
Bayangannya terus menari,
Memaksaku terus mencari
Potongan rusak dari hati,
Tapi tak bisa kembali,
Dulu membara bagaikan api,
Sekarang telah mati,
Hal ini menjadi bukti,
Walau seorang lelaki,
Tak kuat menahan duri,
Yang menusuk menjadi-jadi,
Dapatkah kau mengisi,
Kekosongan di dalam diri,
Dunia terasa sepi,
Hidup seperti tak berarti,
Akankah namaku terpatri,
Di dalam dirimu sampai nanti?

Wajahku yang pucat pasi
Terlunta tanpa energi
Mencari seorang putri
Penerima perasaan suci
Penguasa musim semi
Wajahnya yang berseri
Karya besar Ilahi

Mengapa susah sekali?
Hanya ingin mencintai

Sampai di sini aku permisi,
Akan dilanjutkan lain kali


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Solved Re: Kuza's Love Poems

Post by Kuro vi Lolitannia on Sun Jun 06, 2010 11:28 pm

"Hrm... Aura cintanya terasa.... Walaupun saya lebih suka puisi bertemakan keputusasaan dan kesedihan..." kata Kuro.

"Saya suka bagian Stomping on My Head" kata Kuro.




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Solved Re: Kuza's Love Poems

Post by Kuzakurei_Itachi on Sun Jun 06, 2010 11:41 pm

You got the point, a little SM theme...

Kayaknya yang tema despair ada deh... di post di sini apa buat thread baru ya?
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Solved Re: Kuza's Love Poems

Post by Yuu on Mon Jun 07, 2010 8:46 pm

Englsihnya rada...kacau DX

tapi saya suka kok =)
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Post by Kuzakurei_Itachi on Mon Jun 07, 2010 9:23 pm

hehe... terima kasih... learning in progress...

Itulah enaknya puisi, englishnya bisa dibuat abstrak
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Post by Yuu on Mon Jun 07, 2010 9:52 pm

abstrak boleh abstrak tp susunan dan grammarny hrs tetap di perhatikan ya..
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Post by Kuzakurei_Itachi on Mon Jun 07, 2010 10:03 pm

so desu nee

ok d sensei... hehehe
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Post by Fei Ren on Tue Jun 08, 2010 1:24 am

Wah feelingnya dapet xD *malah nimbrung seenaknya*

Yah, kata guru BI saya *lirik Yuu yang tahu siapa yang saya bicarakan*

Puisi itu tidak mementingkan grammar xD *kalau indo* *PLAK*

Bagus kok puisinya xD
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Post by Kuzakurei_Itachi on Tue Jun 08, 2010 1:36 am

Terima kasih Ren-san

Next time sih mau post yang B.Indo
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Post by Fei Ren on Tue Jun 08, 2010 2:04 am

^sama-sama xD

Wah yang indonesia? Saya tunggu Kuza-sen xDD
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Post by kuroro on Tue Jun 08, 2010 3:13 pm

mana?
blom di aplod ya?
ditunggu nih Very Happy
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Post by Kuzakurei_Itachi on Wed Jun 09, 2010 2:25 am

Sudah update di post ke-1! >_<
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Post by kuroro on Wed Jun 09, 2010 11:14 am

err... maaf kuza-san
tanpa sadar saya menyenandungkan puisinya dengan irama rap
Sweat

nice rhyme you got there Very Happy
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Post by Fei Ren on Wed Jun 09, 2010 4:15 pm

WIH! =)) =))

Saya bacanya kok malah dengan nada ngerap ya? *ditabok* Soalnya rhyme nya pas banget xDD

Puisinya juga keren, penyusunan katanya juga xD

tapi bagian "Sampai di sini aku permisi,
Akan dilanjutkan lain kali"

Merusak suasana =)) =)) *PLAK PLAK*
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Post by Kuzakurei_Itachi on Wed Jun 09, 2010 5:43 pm

Thanks >_<

Kuro:
Belum pernah coba nih..

Fei:
Hehehe... soalnya masih terus dikembangkan, makanya pakai akhiran begitu...

Kuro:
Nambah puisi nambah gold nggak? huehuehue
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Post by Fei Ren on Wed Jun 09, 2010 8:38 pm

weleh =)) ditulis di luar puisinya xDD

kalau di dalam jadi keliatan aneh? *PLAK*
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Post by kuroro on Thu Jun 10, 2010 1:20 pm

klo edit post kayaknya nggak nambah gold deh CMIIW Very Happy
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Post by Fei Ren on Thu Jun 10, 2010 5:25 pm

emang gak nambah =))

Point/gold hanya nambah kalau ngepost ''a pendapatannya disesuaikan oleh admin yang mengatur xD
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Post by Kuzakurei_Itachi on Thu Jun 10, 2010 5:33 pm

waah, gimana ni kuro?
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Post by Yuu on Fri Jun 11, 2010 12:30 am

kok mulai OOT di sini ya..
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Post by Kuzakurei_Itachi on Fri Jun 11, 2010 12:44 am

Ohya... kembali deh... ditunggu ya update selanjutnya...
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Post by Kuro vi Lolitannia on Thu Jun 17, 2010 12:00 am

Untuk Masalah Gold Silakan Klik Disini Untuk Lebih Jelas

"Kalau puisinya bisa yang mantap dan membuat saya merasa WOW maka akan saya kasih gold" kata Kuro.

"Ayo, berusaha, tambah lagi yang baru!"




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Post by koibito on Fri Oct 15, 2010 10:50 am

lucu! err..maksudnya.. bagus!! aku suka.
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Post by kuroneko20 on Thu Oct 21, 2010 5:07 pm

puisiny menusuk d hati ..... keren~~
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